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Do you agree with single-use products cause pollution?

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Prison
 is
very
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 bad and awful place for all
people
.You can'
t
 do everything that you want in
prison
.You are very restricted in
this
 place.You eat
according to
 schedule,you walk
according to
 schedule,you do everything
according to
 schedule.You don'
t
 have
a
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freedom.So,it can be very hard to overcome for some
people
 in
prison
.The mental health of these
people
are
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 under
a
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pressure constantly.It's the main reason why many
criminals
 commit
further
 crimes after they are released from
prison
. The society outside that
suffer
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suffers
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 because of these
criminals
 can lose their
belif
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belief
 and trust
to
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police
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.It
also
 can cause
a
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disorder in a city.Because,if
people
 can'
t
 trust to police,they will judge and catch these
criminals
 by themselves.If
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criminals
 commit their crimes,
people
 will think that there's not any point in these laws and in these punishments.Why
they
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 even have to pay taxes if
police
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doesn'
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t
 do their work?
Also
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 the government
wil
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will
 be
hurted
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.They will need a long time to bring back the trust of
people
.Tourists
also
 won'
t
 go to these cities and countries where there are many crimes.So,it will influence on
economic
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 as well.The fear will cover
the
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society.
People
 will fear
to go
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anywhwere
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anywhere
.They will be worried about their kids
while
 they are in
the
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school
,
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when they are walking and when they are playing.It's gonna
also
 increase the level of the stress of the
people
.
Eveyone
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Everyone
 will buy and own some
gun
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 in their houses to be ready
to
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defense
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defence
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.The government should pass these
criminals
 before releasing them through some psychological tests to know whether these
people
ready
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are ready
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 for life outside or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution
  • single-use products
  • contribute
  • evidence
  • production
  • consumption
  • disposal
  • impact
  • environment
  • unsustainable
  • choice
  • environmental degradation
  • governments
  • individuals
  • reduce
  • tackle
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