The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
This
given bar graph provides information about different
trasportation
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transportation
options that students used to arrive
their
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at their
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schools and come back to their homes in a particular land
and
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in two dissimilar years, 1990 and 2010 respectively.
Overall
,
while
a great majority of kids had chosen to go to these destinations on their
foot
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feet
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in 1990, it can be seen that a significant
number
of students preferred to get to their destinations by using cars. The
number
of students who had walked to reach formerly mentioned places were about 12 in 1990
whereas
this
number
plummeted down to 6 in 2010.
Similarly
, the utilization of other forms of transportation, namely riding a bicycle, getting on a bus and walking and using a bus at the same time, decreased significantly.
Conversely
, the
number
of pupils who arrived
their
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at their
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destinations by car
were
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was
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roughly 4 in 1990
while
this
number
soared to about 11 after 20 years
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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