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“Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.” discuss both views and give your opinion."

#“some #people #sense #competition #children #co-operate #adults
Juveniles
 are delicate,
thus
 we need to take care of their breeding
process
 seriously.
Therefore
, a considerable number of people
supports
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 the idea that parents should bring up their offspring with the
competition
skills
,
whereas
 others consider that
team work
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 abilities exert a significant impact on children's growing
process
 as an adult. In
this
 article, I will be
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highlighting
 both views and
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giving my own opinion on
this
 notion.
One
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 the
one
 side,
sense
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 of
competition
 has a tremendous effect on
juveniles
' academic performance.
In other words
, when they feel they are in a scientific race with others, they might be more interested
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the
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fundamental subjects
such
 as maths, literature,
history
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.
For example
, teachers particularly award the
one
 who is more talented, more logical,
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more fast
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 at learning,
thus
 they commence an academic race between children to foster
learning
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process
.
Hence
, both teachers and parents ought to encourage
the
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children to increase their academic performance with the help of
competition
.
On the other hand
,
the
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co-operation
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 has an enormous influence on
juveniles
' growing
process
, as they perform brainstorming
skills
together with
 their peers and allocate,
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 their ideas.
For example
, as a technical task, students are asked to design a cartoon car, it is probable that students who work together would outperform
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rather
 than those who worked alone,
as well as
 would be benign individuals for
the
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society.
To sum up
, both co-operation and
competition
skills
 have pros and cons
on
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juveniles
' future goal as
a
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useful person for
the
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society. My personal view is that parents should mainly focus on
one
 of them to make their offspring
to
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form as
one
 of the main
skills
.
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