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Some educational systems make students study specialised subjects from the age of fifteen while others require students to study a wide range. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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There are institutions which focus on educating commercial majors once their applicants turned 15 years old. Other educational systems pay attention to broadening their students' range of knowledge.
While
 studying a wide range of subjects has its own benefits, I would argue that learning specialised subjects is more advantageous for the progression of science. The advocates of an unconcentrated learning strategy beginning at 15 are pointing out the merits of
this
 approach being led to cultivate students with a completed package of knowledge. They suggest that
this
 approach is far more beneficial for furthering scientific advances because often scientific breakthroughs are the result of implementing concepts of one field in another.
For instance
, most efficient algorithms which are designed in computer science are influenced by animal behaviour in nature.
Hence
, intellectuals' baggage of other scientific branches like ecology and wildlife can come into use for the advancement of their fields.
However
, I believe that nowadays, becoming an expert in one specific subject is more practical.
This
 is
due to
 current modern advancements
such
 as the Internet and Artificial Intelligence where any non-related information to the subject in question can easily be exploited by a simple search or by asking the AI. Data for a social science survey regarding the citizen's opinion of a product in the market,
for example
, can be manipulated for predicting the company's stock trend in the field of economy.
By comparison
, in the past,
such
 tools were not available to researchers, so they had to study multiple branches in the hopes of being able to connect the dots.
To conclude
, despite the fact that studying a wide range of educational materials can help facilitate achievements, I would argue that concentrating on one area of research is more fruitful given today's available equipment like the Internet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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