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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that schools are the best places to learn this. Discuss both these views.

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Some thinkers opine that fathers and mothers should be held responsible for imbibing good values among their young ones because
children
 have a tendency to imitate their loved ones.
While
 others have an opinion that teachers should teach their pupils how to behave respectfully in society
along with
 teaching academic courses so learners can listen to them seriously and try to implement those learnings in their day-to-day life. It has often been observed that
children
 try to emulate their elders at home and adopt those habits to themselves. when they experience their parents' day-to-day activities with others
such
 as greeting their friends, amiable relations with their neighbours, strong bonds with their colleagues outside the workplace and so on, youngsters learn how to become good members of the community.
For example
,
children
 participate in voluntary work happily as they have seen their parents doing
such
 activities to facilitate others.
Hence
, a father and mother can put a great impact on their son and daughter's life.
Nevertheless
, school teachers have a huge responsibility of teaching an array of subjects to students within a specified period of time, and if they cut down on study time to impart social and moral lessons, it may have an awful impact on the academic session. In
such
 cases, learners may be socially responsible, but may not have a bright educational career ahead.
For instance
, in India, school management does not put unnecessary
burden
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 on pupils except for studies so that they can pass their programs with flying colours. So, it should not be the duty of an educator to teach ethics.
To conclude
, as there is already a great burden on educational institutes to provide the best academic knowledge to their students, parents should be accountable for imbibing values among their
children
 to become a responsible part of society.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
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