The graphs below show the number of calls a company recieved at their Nigerian call centre in connection with the various car models they produced.

The graphs below show the number of calls a company recieved at their Nigerian call centre in connection with the various car models they produced.
This
bar graph illustrates, by five different car models, how many calls a car company received at their call centre in Nigeria in 2010 and 2015.
Overall
, the
number
of calls about
model
D was the highest in both years,
while
that of calls about
model
B
was the lowest.
To begin
with, the
number
of calls about models D, C, and E was the top three, in order, in the years 2010 and 2015.
Model
D was higher than any other at 94 in 2010, and it remained at the top in 2015 with 88.
Model
C in 2010 increased from 71 to 84, recording the second highest
number
of calls in both years,
while
model
E with 68 in 2010 declined to 57 in 2015. Turning to models A and
B
, the
number
of calls about
model
A 52 in 2010 was far higher than
a
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model
B
in 2010. Focusing on in 2015,
although
model
B
decreased by 3,
model
B
was over half of it at 24.
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