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Some people think that the best way to improve road transport safety is to let the driver test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,letting the
driver
test
 each
year
 is widely advocated and encouraged,as it is considered the most effective
way
 for
government
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the government
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 to improve road transport safety.
However
,I would argue that it is not the best
way
.The value of letting the
drive
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test
 each
year
 is overestimated,and the adverse outcome may well appear.
Firstly
,letting the
driver
test
 each
year
 may waste their money and energy,making them feel tired.For many
driver
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drivers
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,a
test
 means that not everyone can pass it.To avoid their
drive
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drive's
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 licences being cancelled,it takes
driver
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the driver
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 a long time to prepare for the
test
.So letting
drivers
test
 each
year
 is a factor for them to be nervous.
Secondly
,some
drivers
 may get a good score
in
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on
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 the
test
,but they do not use these rules or skills in the process of driving.As we know,some rules are often complex,which is hard for
driver
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drivers
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 to obey them.In
the
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apply
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actual situations,
drivers
 may not be patient enough to avoid making mistakes.They just do well in the
test
 for the score. So letting them
test
 each
year
 is not a useful
way
.
Instead
,more attention needs to be drawn to make some punishments in relevant areas.If
driver
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drivers
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 are punished by laws when they make some serious mistake,they will be careful and eager to not make
same
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the same
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 mistakes
in
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at
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 another time.By deliberately limiting
drivers
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drivers'
driver's
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 illegal
behavior
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behaviour
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 and recreating
such
 an atmosphere,we manage to make
drivers
 make
less
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fewer
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 mistakes.
Overall
,letting
drivers
test
 each
year
 may bring some bad effects .It is more effective to make relevant laws to emphasize the importance of road safety. I deeply confirm it is not
a
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 best
way
 to solve
this problems
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this problem
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.
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