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High Rise building - advantage/disadvantage These days more people prefer to live in vertical buildings. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the people?

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It is common nowadays people in the cities prefer to live in the high rise building as its
concidered
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high
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a high
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 standard of
life style
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,
however
 high rise buildings could cause various demerits. I will be discussing
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the merits and demerits of living in a tall vertical building and completing
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my conclusion. On the one hand,apart from
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considering
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 standard of
life style
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,staying in these buildings can provide
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 of fresh cleaner air on their rooftop,most of the
vechiles
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vehicles
 emit carbon-di-oxide at the road level polluting the air we
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 where the rooftop of the buildings are so tall that air at
this
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 not polluted as compared to the ground level.
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 of disadvantages involved in living high rise building
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 as
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 in the case of the fire
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 the 5th floor the precious lives
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 the 20th floor
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 to run
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as early as possible to save their lives provided that the
stair cases
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staircases
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 are not involved in fire.
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