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The map Changes in Murray Island between 1919 and today

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The two maps show how an
island
 has changed over the past century, We can clearly see that a number of significant developments have taken place, creating dramatic differences between the
island
 in 1919 and today. Turning first to the older map of 1919, we can see that almost half of the
island
 was forested and there were few buildings.
However
this
 has changed dramatically, with most of the
island
 now occupied by residential and industrial development, the number of houses has increased exponentially, and a large hospital has been built for the benefit of the residents. A factory has
also
 been constructed in the northwest of the
island
, replacing the farm that was there before, and a large bridge across the River Murray connects the eastern and western areas.
Nonetheless
, some things have remained the same. Murray Castle is still standing, and a substantial area of forest remains in the northeast of the
island
.
However
, the high level of development means that there is much less open space for recreation and leisure than there used to be.
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