Nowadays, many young people are attracted to dangerous sports such as snowboarding or mountain biking. What makes these sports so attractive? What measures should be taken to minimize the risks?

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Young people usually need to try exciting experiences, albeit they could jeopardize their life.

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some of them feel alive only with a high level of adrenaline in their blood.

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teenagers are attracted to dangerous sports

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as snowboarding, mountain biking, bungee jumping or

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early age.

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to minimize the peril with some specific measures. First of all personal protection systems have to be mandatory. Second some lessons at school about the dangers correlated with that kind of sports and how to prevent falls are essential. Only in that

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Nowadays, many young people are attracted to dangerous sports such as snowboarding or mountain biking. What makes these sports so attractive? What measures should be taken to minimize the risks?

Fully explain your ideas

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. Do you agree or disagree?

Too much emphasis is given for education of the young. More government money should be spent to free time activity of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative impact on the environment ,eating habits and families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A restaurant has placed for waiters in your local newspaper. write a letter to the applying fo the job . explain what you are currently doing . describe your suitabilitu for this area of week . say when you can attedn an interview.

Most societies are based on rules and laws. If individuals were free to do whatever they wanted, society could not function. To what extent do you agree or disagree?