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The bar chart below shows the number of employees from the European Union in the United States (1999).

The bar chart below shows the number of employees from the European Union in the United States (1999).
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The chart illustrates information about the number of people from Europe who worked in the USA in different seven different fields in the year 1999.The age group of the worker was above 18.
Overall
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, it can be said that there was a large number of business employees and in ,contrast there were
also
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 unemployed people.
To begin
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 with,business was the most chosen occupation by the people of Europe above 28,000 which was the highest.Followed by , next was a self-earned category which reached
upto
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up to
 30,000.These two sectors were seen more growing.
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 education, restaurants, pharmacy and construction sectors were walking on the same path and had roughly 20,000 staff.

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