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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart describes how much
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 is used among ten
countries
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 in 2014. It looks like there was a slight difference between
production
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 and
consumption
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 among
countries
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.
First,
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China
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 had the biggest
electricity
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production
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 among others (5,398
billion
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kWh
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). It was followed by the United States (US), which had less
electricity
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production
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 than
China
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. There were 1,299
billion
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kWh
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 differences between
China
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 and the US.
However
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, there was a very big gap between both of the
countries
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, and others
such
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 as
Rusia
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Russia
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, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea (around 3,000 - 3,500
billion
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kWh
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).
Korea
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Korea's
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 Rep. was the smallest
electricity
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production
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producer
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 in 2024.
China
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also
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 had the biggest
electricity
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consumption
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 (5,322
billion
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kWh
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). It was the same as the previous one before, the US was known
had
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 a relatively smaller
consumption
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 than
China
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. Almost all
countries
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 had more
production
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 than
consumption
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. But, it was different in Germany, which had more
consumption
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 than
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production
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the production
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 of
electricity
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, electricity, countries, china, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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