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High Rise building - advantage/disadvantage These days more people prefer to live in vertical buildings. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the people?

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The majority of the public claim that skyscrapers have more benefits than choosing live in the countryside. I tend to think that there are many main gains to living in a multistory building
while
 at the discretion of each.  The obvious argument in
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 easy to commute to work ar another
place
 that you should to go.
This
 means that there are many places built near skyscrapers reason to do
this
 there are many people in
this
 building
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 need to go shopping or visit some entertainment places and of ,course visit a work office.
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, the majority of offices are built near high-rises
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nowadays indeed. The second argument for living in a high-rise building is a shipper price for renting and buying a flat
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there.
This
 is because land become more cheaper
due to
 sharing limited places from the bottom to the top. For ,instance
it is clear that
 there are more people choosing to live in multi-storey buildings and
also
 they can share
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one flat for two families to achieve cheapness,
for example
 in a detached house with the same
place
 and conditions you can't afford it with the same money. 
On the other hand
, individuals can not have
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place
 with their own garden in a building
such
 as a detached house. In
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other ,words society that
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 a lot of space with a big
place
 outside will not select skyscrapers for living for a long time. There are many people who think there is by far a drawback to choosing a flat.  Despite the arguments mentioned, there are many reasons to choose a high-rise building, but everyone
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 own preferences and can select where they account
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 advantages or disadvantages.
However
, account to statistics there are more individuals choosing a multistorey building.
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