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High Rise building - advantage/disadvantage These days more people prefer to live in vertical buildings. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the people?

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The majority of the public claim that skyscrapers have more benefits than choosing live in the countryside. I tend to think that there are many main gains to living in a multistory building
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 easy to commute to work ar another
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 that you should to go.
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 means that there are many places built near skyscrapers reason to do
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 there are many people in
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 building
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 need to go shopping or visit some entertainment places and of ,course visit a work office.
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, the majority of offices are built near high-rises
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nowadays indeed. The second argument for living in a high-rise building is a shipper price for renting and buying a flat
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there.
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 is because land become more cheaper
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 sharing limited places from the bottom to the top. For ,instance
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 there are more people choosing to live in multi-storey buildings and
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 they can share
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one flat for two families to achieve cheapness,
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 in a detached house with the same
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 and conditions you can't afford it with the same money. 
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, individuals can not have
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 with their own garden in a building
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 as a detached house. In
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other ,words society that
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 a lot of space with a big
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 outside will not select skyscrapers for living for a long time. There are many people who think there is by far a drawback to choosing a flat.  Despite the arguments mentioned, there are many reasons to choose a high-rise building, but everyone
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 own preferences and can select where they account
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 advantages or disadvantages.
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, account to statistics there are more individuals choosing a multistorey building.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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