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Students in university should be specialized in one subject rather than to develop a wider range of knowledge in many different subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People's opinions vary when it comes to the number of subjects
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 in the university should
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. I disagree with the view that they should choose to
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 only one specific field. From my perspective, having a wide range of interdisciplinary knowledge is
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crucial, which helps to lead to a more satisfactory academic and
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 life. First of all, people are living in a world where various subjects connect with each other, which makes it hard to separate one discipline from another. One of the typical examples of
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 is that economic
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 are expected to have an excellent mastery of math beforehand,
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 it would be impossible for them to tackle complex data analysis.
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, a thorough understanding of other courses in relation to their major will make
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 more capable of solving professional problems.
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, it is not uncommon for bachelors to feel confused about what field they are most interested in.
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, those who have undergone a year of interdisciplinary
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 are less likely to experience similar troubles.
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, they can develop a much clearer scheme for their profession and even
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 path.
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, after acquiring a university degree, most people will head into the job market. For those majoring in disciplines other than economics or marketing, teaching them solely about their own professions will lead to
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 opportunities.
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 choice for someone with a music degree will have to be becoming a music teacher
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 if the person knows nothing about the business
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, leadership skills and managing techniques of another industry.
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, in order to prepare
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 for a larger variety of jobs, cross-disciplinary education would be necessary. In conclusion, it is vital for university
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 to have a knowledge cruise over various subjects, for
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 will be beneficial for their future
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 and
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