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Currently, many people fail to balance the work with the other parts of lives. What are the reasons and how to solve it?

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Recently, many
people
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struggle
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 to make
balance
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a balance
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 between their personal lives and their work. There are several contributions to
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 phenomenon,
as
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 high personal expectations from the society and
spereading
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speaking
 of technology. To tackle
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 issue governments should make rules preventing
people
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 from
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vital
 labour laws.
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, increase
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people
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 awareness of their mental health. Technology is booming more and more ,
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 leads to
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 a load on
employees
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 to be in
countiuse
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continues
 development because they
affried
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afraid
 of being replaced.
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, Ghat Gpt now is working as a university of knowledge it has many
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of
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 our problems in life .
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 , workers are
affried
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afraid
 to be replaced by artificial intelligent s.
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, high exceptions of society make the
employees
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 answer job emails in their spare time.
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,
the
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they
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 will have a problem of working for many hours. To address
this
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 situation, governments should make rules to prevent
viatle
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viable
little
 labour
lows
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laws
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 and limit hours of working per day. To explain, in the
nedrelands
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Nederlands
,
employees
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are not exceed
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 working for
8hours
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8 hours
 per day.
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, increasing
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employees
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employees'
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awareness of their mental health and
to
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apply
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sitting
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setting
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a barrier between professional and personal life will
also
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 solve
this
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 issue.
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, Irush
people
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 make a separation between their
week ends
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weekends
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 days and their time of work ,
esppically
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especially
, teachers there they are not answering their
student
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students
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 questions
during
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at
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the week
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week end
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weekend
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. In conclusion, currently, many
people
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are have
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are having
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 challenges in balancing
between
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apply
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their personal and professional lives, because of,
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a
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decline of
the
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apply
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metal heath
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mental health
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 awareness among
employees
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 and the wide development of technology.
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