The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
The chart below indicates the changes in the percentage of people with electrical equipment in comparison with
hours
spent doing housework from 1920 to year
2019.
Change the article
the year
Overall
, electrical appliances are various. Moreover
, technology entered our lives so all of our duties become easier because we depend on technology.
Closely, we can relate that in 1920 the highest electrical machine that been used is the washing machine and the lowest one was the refrigerator. Due to
that, the hours
of house cleaning were the highest hours
.
In comparison. The using of electrical machines in houses has increased each year. Especially, the vacuum cleaner and the refrigerator.
In 2019 the hours
that were spent while
house cleaning decreased, and it’s been the lowest since 1920.
In conclusion, we can relate that due to
the high of electrical ,machines
the time spent cleaning the houses is less.Add a comma
,machines
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