Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People
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are argued whether the government should support individuals who are not working for a long time seeking an appropriate
job
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. Is it
fare
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fair
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to force them
bring
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the
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contribution to
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society making some voluntary
work
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? I
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reckon
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that
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approach is absolutely right because all of
benefits
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received by long-term
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seekers should be
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to the community. Nowadays, many
people
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try to find any reasons to not
working
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work
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at all. They invent all sorts of circumstances and obstacles to delay starting a working process. By the way, the government pay some money to support
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false
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seekers, who in
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do nothing for their career.
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sort of
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who find
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sutable
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suitable
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living
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on someone else's money. In fact, it is
unfairly
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to spend
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the money
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of
others taxpayer
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other taxpayers
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for
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people
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who do not strive to
work
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. A good practice will be
attract
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to attract
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unemployed citizens to do voluntary
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and give something back to the community. They could be useful in making
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the city
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there
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where
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they live cleaner by picking up
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apply
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rubbish in
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public places
such
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as parks and river banks. They could
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take care of the eldest
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bringing them
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groceries
or helping in a household. These activities could be a great role model for the young generation and make a fundamental contribution in the future. I absolutely
convincend
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convinced
, that all
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should do something valuable for
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society.
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, the government
shoud
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should
subsidize long-term
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seekers more wisely considering
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whether is
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it definitely
need
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needed
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or not, and want they really
work
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or not.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Long-term job seekers
  • Government benefits
  • Voluntary work
  • Community service
  • Employability
  • Sense of purpose
  • Mental health
  • Stigma
  • Unemployed
  • Public funds
  • Positively impact
  • Community
  • Exploit
  • Vulnerable individuals
  • Devalue
  • Volunteerism
  • Informal contributions
  • Skill-matching
  • Beneficial and fulfilling
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