"Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is a waste of money. Give your opinion."
Paucity
of people Add an article
The paucity
A paucity
think
that more investment should be made Change the verb form
thinks
on
safeguarding Change preposition
in
imperil
Replace the word
imperilled
species
. Conversely
, others think it is the
Correct article usage
a
wastage
of Replace the word
waste
fund
.Throughout Fix the agreement mistake
funds
this
essay, I will explore both the sides of discourse, whether
to spend or not Change preposition
on whether
in
Change preposition
on
this
extinct species
.Firstly
, I will discuss why we should do it, and Secondly
I will talk through why we shouldn't expend on Add a comma
,Secondly
this
.
As all of us know, we are a part of an ecosystem and to maintain the balance we need to preserve the food
chain. As animals and plants are dependent on each other for their survival, absence
of an Correct article usage
the absence
endanger
Change the form of the verb
endangered
species
will create imbalance
on the planet. Because of the pollution that we Add an article
an imbalance
human
are creating, many Fix the agreement mistake
humans
species
are harmed due to
that. In turn
it will Add a comma
,turn
also
affects
our lives. Change the verb form
affect
For example
, American Bison are diminishing, humans who relied on them for food
and fur trading will be impacted greatly and we have to find other sources. There is a Domino effect, as one goes it affects the other and eventually the other will also
comes
to Change the verb form
come
an
extinction. Remove the article
apply
For Example
, Polar bears rely on seals for food
, and seals are dependent on plankton, who
eats ice algae, Correct pronoun usage
which
due to
climate change ice melts and the algae population
drops thats
Correct your spelling
that
that's
affects
seals and Wrong verb form
affecting
that
decreases Correct pronoun usage
apply
polar
bear Correct article usage
the polar
population
.
On the other hand
, due to
increase
in Correct article usage
the increase
population
and growing demands, we need resources that requires
huge investment.
There is an Change the verb form
require
oppurtunity
cost of meeting demands or Correct your spelling
opportunity
to save
an Change the verb form
saving
endanger
Change the form of the verb
endangered
species
. Also
, if we start using renewable energy and other sources to protect the environment we can save these species
and it won't be much costly but we have to bit compromise on our life style
. Correct your spelling
lifestyle
For example
, Overfishing occurs when people take too much food
from oceans, so by reducing that, increase
Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
fish
Correct article usage
the fish
population
and also
prevents disruption in food
web.If we ban Add an article
the food
a food
usage
of plastics, Add an article
the usage
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
also
don't demand investment,we can reduce impact
Add an article
the impact
on
climate change, like in India. Change preposition
of
As a result
, many species
can revive their lives.
Though we are facing many challanges
of Correct your spelling
challenges
population
and growing needs, it is necessary to prevent and protect the extinct speices
as it is a significant part of our planet. We need to allocate funds to save them and Correct your spelling
species
also
opt for organic and simple life style
without harming Correct your spelling
lifestyle
the
society Correct article usage
apply
that
will help us in both spending less and saving the Correct pronoun usage
which
species
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