"Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is a waste of money. Give your opinion."

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of people

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that more investment should be made

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safeguarding

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species

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wastage

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fund

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essay, I will explore both the sides of discourse,

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to spend or not

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extinct

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. As all of us know, we are a part of an ecosystem and to maintain the balance we need to preserve the

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chain. As animals and plants are dependent on each other for their survival,

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of an

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species

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will create

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on the planet. Because of the pollution that we

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are creating, many

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are harmed

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our lives.

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, American Bison are diminishing, humans who relied on them for

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and fur trading will be impacted greatly and we have to find other sources. There is a Domino effect, as one goes it affects the other and eventually the other will

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extinction.

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eats ice algae,

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climate change ice melts and the algae

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drops

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decreases

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bear

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and growing demands, we need resources that

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huge investment. There is an

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endanger

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species

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, if we start using renewable energy and other sources to protect the environment we can save these

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and it won't be much costly but we have to bit compromise on our

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, Overfishing occurs when people take too much

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from oceans, so by reducing that,

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fish

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and

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prevents disruption in

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web.If we ban

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of plastics,

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don't demand investment,we can reduce

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climate change, like in India.

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, many

species

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can revive their lives. Though we are facing many

challanges

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challenges

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and growing needs, it is necessary to prevent and protect the extinct

speices

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species

as it is a significant part of our planet. We need to allocate funds to save them and

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opt for organic and simple

life style

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without harming

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apply

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society

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will help us in both spending less and saving the

species

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"Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is a waste of money. Give your opinion."

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The government has the duty to ensure that its citizens have a healthy diet, while others believe this is individuals’ responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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