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Rich countries should not employ skilled labour from poor countries, as poor countries need the worker more. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Powerful countries tend to absorb workers from broken lands, which is not appropriate as these communities are more needed in their own locations.
Whereas
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, I completely disagree with
this
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 statement as I will discuss in the following paragraphs. First of all,
it is clear that
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 by joining worthy adults to a nationality which is already successful as labour, the needy country will find a lesser chance to improve and soar itself. It is
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 the wealthy region will continue being more and more superior.
For instance
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, the number of Third Word public leaving their homes to take jobs as a worker in First Word to erect some new skyscrapers, can build up their unblessed houses and
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 make an effort to reclaim their own environment.
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, there is no doubt that these mentioned migrated ones are obviously under the pressure of being unworthy in these new places, and
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 can significantly damage their pride and
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, impair the picture of their nationality. A clear example is Afghans who always receive disrespect from the society whom they are working for all over the world as they are mostly known as poor labours.
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, I strongly believe that adopting employees from miserable countries will result in destroying these crowd's nationality and pride and
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 ,
therefore
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, they will remain in their position as a poor land, or worst, it leads to even weaken it.
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