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the maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

the maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
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The maps depict both Norbiton industrial city and the future layout of the site. Now, the city contains a
river
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 which
cross
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 the farmland
in
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on
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 the north side.
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, there is a long
road
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 with
a
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one square and a small
road
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 to the est. There are 8 factories all around the
road
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 but
it
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 will be replaced by housing areas in the future.
Furthermore
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, the town
boundry
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boundary
 is going to be in the same place as it is in Norbiton. In the
future
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 there will be two individual squares.
At
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In
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 the first round
about
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we will see the medical
center
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centre
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in
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on
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 the right side and several shops
in
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on
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 the left. As
,
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 the industrial city will be turned out to be
residentioal
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residential
 all the factories will be gone.
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, there will be one playground in the northeast below the
river
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 and a school
at the end
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 of the
road
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 .
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,
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 there is going to be a canal in order to get access to the other side of the
river
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 and wave
a
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new housing.
Although
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, because of the housing
expantion
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expansion
 the farmland will be much smaller.
Overall
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, there are the same
river
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, town area and one main
road
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 but it will be completely
reverse
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reversed
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 because they will after industrial areas to a place to live with a playground,school, medical
center
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centre
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, shops and a canal in the middle of the
river
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Vocabulary: Replace the words river, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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