Many countries aim to improve their living standard by economic developnent but some important social values are lost as a result. Do you think advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages.
Nowadays, so many countries are trying to reach a better living standard economically. Some individuals believe that different kinds of social values are lost
as a result
of that. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this
statement. Moreover
, in this
,essay I will discuss how important economic development is for a country.
Firstly
, some individuals believe that the economic improvement of a country is more important than other progressions. Although
other social values are important for maintaining the quality of life
, the economy is indispensable. For instance
, though, education is the most valuable thing in the world, but, if someone has
not rich in Verb problem
is
money
they will not be able to continue higher education after school. Furthermore
, it is essential that money
to buy books, pens, and other materials for pursuing studies, but if someone has
notVerb problem
does
a
strong economy the studies will stop at a standstill.
Add a missing verb
have a
Secondly
, in the present ,world everyone should have a job
to survive their life
. But, there
is compulsory for a good Correct pronoun usage
it
economical
status to buy new clothes or Correct word choice
economic
for spending
Change preposition
to spend
money
on transportation. For example
, an individual who gets public transport to go to his job
should have money
for a month for going
to the Change preposition
to go
job
. If it is not they will not be able to continue their job
.
In conclusion, it is more important that improve economic status to reach a quality life
than other social values. If someone has
not rich in Verb problem
is
money
, they may suffer in their life
, such
as they will not be able to buy something they like. It is my hope to see everyone has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
standard
Correct article usage
a standard
life
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