Many countries aim to improve their living standard by economic developnent but some important social values are lost as a result. Do you think advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages.

Nowadays, so many countries are trying to reach a better living standard economically. Some individuals believe that different kinds of social values are lost
as a result
of that. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
this
statement.
Moreover
, in
this
,essay I will discuss how important economic development is for a country.
Firstly
, some individuals believe that the economic improvement of a country is more important than other progressions.
Although
other social values are important for maintaining the quality of
life
, the economy is indispensable.
For instance
, though, education is the most valuable thing in the world, but, if someone
has
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not rich in
money
they will not be able to continue higher education after school.
Furthermore
, it is essential that
money
to buy books, pens, and other materials for pursuing studies, but if someone
has
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not
a
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strong economy the studies will stop at a standstill.
Secondly
, in the present ,world everyone should have a
job
to survive their
life
. But,
there
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is compulsory for a good
economical
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economic
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status to buy new clothes or
for spending
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to spend
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money
on transportation.
For example
, an individual who gets public transport to go to his
job
should have
money
for a month
for going
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to the
job
. If it is not they will not be able to continue their
job
. In conclusion, it is more important that improve economic status to reach a quality
life
than other social values. If someone
has
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not rich in
money
, they may suffer in their
life
,
such
as they will not be able to buy something they like. It is my hope to see everyone
has
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have
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standard
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a standard
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life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • living standards
  • economic development
  • infrastructural facilities
  • unemployment
  • poverty levels
  • technological advancements
  • environmental degradation
  • biodiversity
  • income disparities
  • cultural heritage
  • sustainable growth
  • stress levels
  • policy-making
  • mitigate
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