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Many countries aim to improve their living standard by economic developnent but some important social values are lost as a result. Do you think advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays, so many countries are trying to reach a better living standard economically. Some individuals believe that different kinds of social values are lost
as a result
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 of that. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
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 statement.
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, in
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 ,essay I will discuss how important economic development is for a country.
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, some individuals believe that the economic improvement of a country is more important than other progressions.
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 other social values are important for maintaining the quality of
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, the economy is indispensable.
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, though, education is the most valuable thing in the world, but, if someone
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 not rich in
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 they will not be able to continue higher education after school.
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, it is essential that
money
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 to buy books, pens, and other materials for pursuing studies, but if someone
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 not
a
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strong economy the studies will stop at a standstill.
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, in the present ,world everyone should have a
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 to survive their
life
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. But,
there
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it
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 is compulsory for a good
economical
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economic
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 status to buy new clothes or
for spending
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to spend
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money
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 on transportation.
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, an individual who gets public transport to go to his
job
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 should have
money
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 for a month
for going
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 to the
job
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. If it is not they will not be able to continue their
job
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. In conclusion, it is more important that improve economic status to reach a quality
life
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 than other social values. If someone
has
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 not rich in
money
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, they may suffer in their
life
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,
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 as they will not be able to buy something they like. It is my hope to see everyone
has
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have
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standard
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a standard
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life
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.

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task response
Your essay lacks clear focus on the task. Ensure you address all aspects of the question and provide a balanced argument with supporting reasons and examples.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • living standards
  • economic development
  • infrastructural facilities
  • unemployment
  • poverty levels
  • technological advancements
  • environmental degradation
  • biodiversity
  • income disparities
  • cultural heritage
  • sustainable growth
  • stress levels
  • policy-making
  • mitigate
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