The most important reasons for a young person to attend a university is to increase the amount of money that he or she will earn in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Being Financially independent as early as possible in life is becoming the mantra of
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today's generation.
Students
think the whole
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of attending to the University is for the better earning in their upcoming careers.In
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would like to discuss
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how my opinion differs from that. Universities are the best places for
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people to get
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education
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and
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However
,most
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education
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that Degree rather than focussing on
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studies. As a result of
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educational institutions are not having
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adequate knowledge and
skills
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instead
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new technicalities.
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has revealed that 80% of the graduates
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are underskilled and lack
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technical knowledge.
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or developed
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are earning huge salaries.Most
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organisations are not looking for the Education Background of the employee if he is highly potential enough for the role.
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school education was selected by
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Google for a hefty amount as an ethical hacker. In a nutshell, Having a University Degree Definitely lacks
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value until the holder has sufficient
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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