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Weddings are getting bigger and more expensive. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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An ample amount of
persons
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people
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 spend immoderate amounts of
money
 on
such
 sumptuous celebrations,
specially
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especially
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weddings
.
This
 can be attributed to several factors, which can be considered to be
negative
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a negative
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 trend. There are many reasons for
this
 development, two of which are the purposes of showing off
people
's wealth and hobbies of extravagant spending.One possible explanation is that almost all
people
 take pride when others admire them for their wealth. To take
this
 pride, they allocated exclusive possessions for organizing luxurious
weddings
. Another reason worth mentioning is that more and more
people
 have hobbies of extravagant spending. In fact, they love using lucrative products with the purpose of feeling
superiority
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.
Thus
, they spend too much
money
 on items which are not necessary for
weddings
. In my opinion,
this
 trend is negative. One obvious issue is
sentimental
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 family. Chief among these is that many
people
 spend immoderate amounts of
money
 on
such
 sumptuous celebrations.The worst consequence to be considered is that they would live in an era of indebtedness.
Due to
 that, they quarrel with each other on a daily basis
and
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which
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 negatively
affect
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 mental health when living in
such
 unhappy families.
This
 results in divorce. Another potential problem is that wastage. In a luxury wedding, they use a lot of luxury decorative materials thrown away as it is impossible for them to serve the purpose of reusing.
Hence
 they waste
money
 and resources. In conclusion, many reasons can be given to explain the tendency of setting up bigger and more costly
weddings
 partly , and
this
 can give rise to many issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lavish
  • extravagant
  • nuptials
  • matrimony
  • social status
  • opulence
  • milestone
  • financial leverage
  • debt
  • peer pressure
  • consumerism
  • showcase event
  • ceremonial splendor
  • bridal extravaganza
  • market forces
  • commercialization
  • budgeting
  • social comparison
  • destinal wedding
  • event planning
  • wedding vendors
  • loan
  • prestige
  • economic impact
  • mandatory spending
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