Some people think that hard working and determination are the key factors for being successful in the life, other people feel that other factors are important. Discuss both sides, what is your opinion?

some individuals may believe that the only reason for being
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intend to
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agree with the latter idea. on the one hand, proponents of
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things are reachable through the strong determination for achieving them. they believe people may not need
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such
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intelligence
in order to make dreams come true which means that they have not any limitation to progress except the quantity of their
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and
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was far
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slower than
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only because of his
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world
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efforting and craving to reach something would not guarantee success. in
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such
as wealth status,
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intelligence
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people have no
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, can be prominent.
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of death
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, they cannot provide even mediocre facilities for their vita.
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money multiples money.
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reiterate that as we live in
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world, higher
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are needed in order to guarantee
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success and contrary to past determination and striving is not sufficient.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • perseverance
  • skill development
  • overcoming obstacles
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • grit
  • entrepreneurs
  • existing connections
  • industries
  • career paths
  • balanced perspective
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