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online education and learning is becoming increasingly popular in business. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, more and more
people
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 are declining to get some knowledge using online sources
instead
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 of getting offline education. Undoubtedly, there are many benefits from
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 type of training which outweigh all possible drawbacks, especially in business. First of all,
online
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 study gives working
people
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 an opportunity to make a suitable schedule and attend classes when it is more convenient for them.
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, it is widely spread to take courses on evenings or weekends because it allows learners not to distract from their work responsibilities.
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, taking lectures online expands horizons and provides an opportunity to be taught by tutors from all over the world. Especially,
people
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 realized
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 perspective during the pandemic when all pupils were at their home and
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 remotely. Against the fact, that online learning does not allow communication with teachers in person,
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 type of training becomes more popular,
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 for shy
people
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, who have some trouble meeting
people
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 and feel confident being taught from home.
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, there has been a significant increase in the need for online learning. As it is known, demand creates supply.
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 why there are now a huge number of companies offering various kinds of online courses. I am absolutely convinced that getting an education online provides
people
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 with more advantages than disadvantages. Taking into account the rapid pace of life, when working individuals do not have a chance to educate offline, online courses are a great opportunity to get some useful knowledge or degree in any field.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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