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In many parts of the world, children's were very different from today. What do you think weather adventages or disadventages of life for children in the past?

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Nowadays
today
's generations are very reprobate but all of them are not. I mean that there are both
adventages
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advantages
 and
disadventages
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disadvantages
 of
life
 for
children
 in the past and
today
.
This
 essay will analyze
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the benifits
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benifits
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benefits
 of drawbacks of
this
 issue. On the positive side, many
of
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youngesters
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youngsters
 have self-confidence, freedom for their work and
also
children
's
character
 are quite the same elder's
character
.
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 action
help
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helps
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tenageers
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teenagers
 to feel comfort among people and to find their position in
the
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life
.
For example
,
today
's
tenageers
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teenagers
 are eager in a number of fields. In education, many
of
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students gain more
achievments
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achievements
 than in the past. Youngers
aredone
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are done
 well -
konown
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known
 our
cuontry
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country
 to the globe by
this
 way, all in
all
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today
's generations are better and achieve than in the past.
On the other hand
,
number
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a number
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 of parents gripe to psychologists about their
children
's
character
. In my
view
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,view
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 there are several reasons
to
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for
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this
problems
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problem
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 because in the past
times
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,times
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 none of
children
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the children
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 had
character
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a character
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that is
 like
today
's
character
of
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child
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the child
a child
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.
For example
, in the
past
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 every
children
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child
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 listen carefully
their
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to their
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 parents, not only
parents
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their parents
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 but
also
each
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apply
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of
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elder
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the elder
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 people. The main reason
of
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for
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this
 issue is phones, social
life
, not
make
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friend
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friends
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 with other
childre
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children
,
not
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and not
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have
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having
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interesting
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an interesting
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 environment which is living in their
life
 and changes.
This
 type of
things
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thing
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 will negative impact
to
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on
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 their
life
 and
character
.
To sum up
,
today
's period is
diametrical
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 different versus past times,
also
 modern
life
 , living pace speed ,
while
 you are about it, obviously
children
 should be different
than
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from
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 past
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imaginative play
  • supportive environment
  • community bonds
  • outdoor activities
  • technological advancements
  • educational opportunities
  • responsibilities
  • mental health awareness
  • independent exploration
  • traditional gender roles
  • cultural heritage
  • historical knowledge
  • healthcare advancements
  • childhood development
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