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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate the design of Grange
Park
 in the year 1920 when it was established and its form in the present time.
Overall
, there have been many significant
changes
 in all parts except the two main entrances. In the past, there were more gardens and outdoor places for doing various activities
while
 there are more buildings nowadays. One obvious change is the fountain in the centre of the
park
 was destroyed and a
rose
garden
 which is surrounded by some seats has been built
instead
. To the northeast of the
park
, there were a
rose
garden
 and a pond for water plants which are converted into a cafe and the children’s play area, respectively. Below them, seats and the glasshouse were demolished and a water feature is constructed which is on the underground car
park
 entrance.
In addition
 to the
changes
 in the centre and the east side of the
park
, some other
changes
 have occurred to the opposite side. One drastic is the music stage is replaced with an Amphitheatre for concerts.
While
 the
rose
garden
 to the northwest of the
park
 remains in the same location, another
rose
garden
 near the south entrance
as well as
 all seats to the west have been removed. As can be seen,
in addition
 to that
rose
garden
, two main entrances remain without any
changes
.
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  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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