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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The chart illustrates the percentage of using social media
sities
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sites
 by Canadian people in 2014 and 2015.
It is clear that
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 the most proportion of using
network
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the network
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 took place on one
site
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side
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,
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apply
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while
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 using five
sites
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 by far was
lowest
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the lowest
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percent
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per cent
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 in both years . One site had the highest
using
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use
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 of
network
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the network
a network
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, at about 36% and 28%, for 2014 and 2015, respectively.
while
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 using any
sites
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 went down just
by1
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by 1
% in 2015. By
contrats
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contrast
, the percentage of using two
sites
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 rose from 23% in 2014,
24
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to 24
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 % in 2015. The proportion of people using more than two
sites
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were
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was
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 below 20% in both years,
while
Linking Words
 using more than two
sites
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 rose
daramatically
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dramatically
in 2015. Using five
sites
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 increased double in 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sites with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative data
  • Utilization
  • Consecutive years
  • Overall trends
  • Proportion
  • Notable changes
  • Consistencies
  • Diversification
  • Summarize
  • Reflecting
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