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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreading. Do you think this is positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays it is pretty popular for
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 around the world to move to
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 from rural areas. So,
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 become densely populated and
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 factor can cause bad consequences which I am going to elaborate on in
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. First of all, moving from the countryside means that
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 have the potential to increase their population, thereby there will be more crowded
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 in which
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 might feel uncomfortable.
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, New York expanding in the number of its citizens,
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 main
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 like Central Park or the Soho area appear to be very noisy
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 the fact that most of the residents of the city visit them. Overcrowded
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 can cause hustle and bustle and these aspects can influence badly on
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 who work or leave near
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 areas.
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,
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 the population of some
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 is growing significantly it can lead to more greenhouse emissions.
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,
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 there are a lot of
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 living in a city the majority of them are likely to have a car. It is essential for individuals to commute and get around the city. The usage of cars in big numbers means that the air is becoming polluted. CO2 emissions are a big problem nowadays that causes climate change and using cars in densely populated
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 only makes the situation worse. In conclusion, migration to
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 from the countryside can cause overcrowded
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 from which society will not benefit.
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 has a bad impact on the environment and the problem of climate change is rising every day.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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