The pie charts below show average household expanditure in Hong Kong and Britain in the year 2000.

The pie charts below show average household expanditure in Hong Kong and Britain in the year 2000.
The pie charts show the
proportion
of money spent on various household expenses in
Hong
Kong
and
Britain
in 2000. we can see that in
Hong
Kong
the greatest
proportion
of expenditure (32%) was on housing,
while
in
Britain
housing accounted for just 18% of the total.
In contrast
, in
Britain
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the greatest single expense was other goods and services at 36%, compared with 28% in
Hong
Kong
. Food came in second place in
Britain
, at 22%,
while
in
Hong
Kong
the actual
proportion
was higher (27%). In
Britain
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,Britain
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another major expense was transport, at 17%, but
this
was much lower in
Hong
Kong
(9%). In both
countries
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the smallest percentage of expenditure was on clothing.
Overall
, the data indicates that in both cases food, housing and other goods and services were the main expenses, but in
Britain
, transport and other goods and services took up a higher
proportion
of total expenditure than in
Hong
Kong
.
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