The table shows the local caches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia, 2004 and 2014.

The table shows the local caches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia, 2004 and 2014.
The provided data in the table illustrates the trends in local fresh
fish
caught and imported in Perth over a ten-year period (2004-2014).
Overall
, from 2004 to 2014 more fresh
fish
was imported rather than caught.
Furthermore
, the local fresh
fish
caught in Perth grew exponentially,
conversely
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the figure for imported
fish
fluctuated through the years. In 2004 the local
fish
had a figure of 2677. 7 metric
tons
, from that year until 2008 the
number
rose exponentially, reaching, the same year, its peak at 8136. 2 metric
tons
.
However
,
this
increase was followed by a decrease the year after (in 2009), with a data of 7844. 9 metric
tons
. It
then
fell sharply,
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having a level of 4739. 9 metric
tons
in 2013, except for a tiny upswing in 2014 (5031. 9 metric
tons
).
On the contrary
, the
number
of imports during
this
period fluctuated significantly. The highest level of imports into Perth happened in 2012, with 1227. 3 metric
tons
,
while
the lowest in 2005, with solely 231. 6 metric
tons
, smaller than the lowest
number
for local fresh
fish
, at 2677. 7 metric
tons
.
On the other hand
, with the only exception of 2005, 2006 and 2008, there were more imported
fish
rather than local ones.
Lastly
, the highest total
number
of fresh
fish
(either caught or imported) was in 2009, with a
number
of 8949 metric
tons
.
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  • Local catch
  • Imports
  • Fresh fish
  • Trends
  • Significant changes
  • Fishing industry
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic factors
  • Policy changes
  • Market impact
  • Quantitative analysis
  • Comparative analysis
  • Data interpretation
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