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Some believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some occupations,
such
 as doctors and engineers, need some advanced training to achieve higher
competencies
. Several pieces of training are different respective each area. Because of that, some
people
 believe that they should
work
 where they took their educations. Personally, I have a stance that everyone has their own free will to
work
 everywhere they want, even if it must be in other locations. We will discuss these two opinions.
Firstly
, every
country
 in the world has different geographical
conditions
. That differences give unique
conditions
 for natural resource availability, and they will make direct impacts on their societies.
Due to
 that differences, every
country
 has its own specialities in the knowledge aspect.
As a result
, everyone will have choices to take their courses based on each
country
's specialities. In an ideal condition,
people
 who take certain curriculums based on specific abilities should be required to
work
 in the same field as their
competencies
 and in the same place where they took their education. Many
people
 agree with
this
 statement because it will make
people
 easier to adapt and master certain things. There are some
countries
 that immigrant-oriented. In these
countries
, jobs will be more secure as the government will guarantee the occupation for each immigrant based on their abilities.
On the other hand
, the
job
 availability of each
country
also
 has different
conditions
. In strict
countries
 with no chance of jobs for foreigners or
countries
 with economic difficulties, it will be hard for
job
 seekers to get a
job
. To face
this
 condition, many jobseekers search for other opportunities in different
countries
, even if they must be different from their capabilities. To tackle
this
 obstacle, many immigrants and employees take other courses in recipient
countries
 to keep up their
competencies
 with the local workforce, especially doctors. In conclusion, professionals should
work
 in the
countries
 where they took training, as
people
 will be easier to adapt and master their own field. But, we can't deny that every
countries
 have different geographical and
job
 availability
conditions
. Those factors influence the workforce to follow each
country
's
conditions
 to get occupations. Favour
conditions
 will make
job
 seekers do their
job
 the same as their
competencies
,
otherwise
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 unfavoured
conditions
 will make employees do things that differ from their own abilities. In my personal view,
due to
 these factors, everyone has the choice to choose where they will
work
 and get a salary, both because of their own free will or forced by
conditions
.
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