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The graph below shows the average numbers of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000 and 2015.

The graph below shows the average numbers of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000 and 2015.
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The given line graph gives information about the mean figure of
students
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 from Vietnam pursuing their education in
France
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,
Russia
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 and America, from 2000 to 2015. As an
overall
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 assessment, it can be clearly seen that the popularity of America has increased among
students
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 over the period of 15 years, with almost 500 thousand of them studying there in 2015. Despite
France
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 being the most preferred country by enlistment
initially
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, America surpasses it between 2005 and 2010. In 2000, around 1.5
million
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students
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 are educating themselves in the USA.
This
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 amount witnesses a steady increase till 2010, before it jumped to reach its culmination at 5
million
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, the highest among all other categories.
France
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 and
Russia
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 observed approximately 3.5 and 3
million
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 Vietnamese
students
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 in 2000.
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, both these figures dropped massively between 2000 and 2005. Following that,
this
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 figure remained stagnant for
France
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, but it took a downturn for
Russia
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.
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, the scenario for
France
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 changed in 2010, when it witnessed a huge rise in number of
students
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 between 2010 and 2015, bringing the figure to almost 4.5
million
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.
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, a slow increment was
also
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 observed in
Russia
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, though not as steep as in
France
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, leaving its student count just below its start which is 2.75
million
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, france, russia, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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