THe line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

THe line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
This
line graph illustrates the average
temperature
per month in three different cities,
Paris
,
Dubai
, and
Sydoney
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Sydney
.
Overall
, Sydney was the hottest in
summer time
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,
while
Paris
was the coldest in
winter time
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wintertime
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.
Moreover
, the
temperature
record in
Sydoney
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Sydney
followed
a
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the
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opposite pattern as
other
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in other
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countries. Focusing on the results of
survey
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a survey
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about
temperature
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the temperature
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in
Dubai
and
Paris
,
Dubai
was around 19
degree
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degrees
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on
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in
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January, recording the lowest
teperature
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temperature
throughout the whole time frame. Over the next seven months,
Dubai
's
temperature
was the highest, reaching a peak of
appproximately
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approximately
36
degree
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degrees
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. After August,
Dubai
's
temperature
decreased to around 23
degree
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degrees
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in December.
On the other hand
,
Paris
'
temperature
record followed quite a fairly similar pattern as
Dubai
's, recording
at
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a
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maximum
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a maximum
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20
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of 20
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degree
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degrees
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on
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in
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Jun and July,
minimum
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a minimum
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five
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of five
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dgree
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degrees
on
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in
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January and December. Turning to the
temperature
record in Sydney,
there
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their
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winter season and summer season were
oppiste
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opposite
as
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of
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other
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the other
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twe
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two
the
countries. It started
with
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at
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24
degree
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degrees
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on
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in
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January and declined
at
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to
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15
degree
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degrees
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in July, which was the lowest
levels
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level
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of
there
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their
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records. After that point,
temperature
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the temperature
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was
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increased slightly to 23
degree
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degrees
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in
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at
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end
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the end
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of the year.
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