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The table and bar graph below showstime spent in leisure and householdactivities in the UK. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisonswhere relevant.

The table and bar graph below showstime spent in leisure and householdactivities in the UK. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisonswhere relevant.
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The table and bar graph illustrate how much
time
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 is spent on leisure and
household
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activities
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 in the United Kingdom.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the TV and some related methods of entertainment enjoy the highest popularity among both
men
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 and
women
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while
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 cooking and washing take up the most
time
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 in four
household
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activities
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. Concerning leisure
activities
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, the majority of leisure
time
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 is occupied by TV, video ,and radio, average at 137
minutes
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 per
day
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 and 118
minutes
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 respectively. The
time
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 spent by
women
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 on reading is 19
minutes
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 a
day
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 on average, slightly higher than that spent by
men
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 at 18
minutes
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. Ranked in the
last
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 position is sports, with
men
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 spending 15
minutes
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 per
day
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 and
women
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 11
minutes
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 . With regard to
household
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 parts, the
time
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 spent on them varies a lot between the two genders.In general, the average
time
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 costing
women
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 on
household
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activities
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 is much higher than that which
men
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 contribute to.
Women
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 spend 75
minutes
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 on cooking and washing on a daily basis, tripling that spent by
men
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 only at 25
minutes
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.The only
household
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 activity
men
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 spend more
time
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 on is repair, at nearly twenty
minutes
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 .Repairing is the least populous
Household
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 activity among females with only twenty
minutes
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 spent per
day
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.When it comes to males,clothing washing and ironing cost 10
minutes
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 daily on average, ranking fourth among those four projects.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, household, activities, men, women, minutes, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution of time
  • leisure activities
  • household activities
  • comparative analysis
  • societal preferences
  • lifestyle choices
  • demographic groups
  • time allocation
  • trends and patterns
  • social or economic changes
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