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Ordinary people try to copy famous personalities by seeing them on TV or reading about them in the newspapers. What is the reason for this? Is it a good idea to copy famous personalities?

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everybody knows that we live in modern times and a lot of
people
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following
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 other folk who are famous. they try to model famous personalities on TV or social media. it has advantages or disadvantages to
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 following who. That essay discourses about
copy
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public
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 are beneficial or not.
one
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 the
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 hand, sometimes trying
copy
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 to
people
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 can be so beneficial. because, when
people
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 were born learning
everting
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everything
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copy
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 systems
such
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 as babies. they try to
copy
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 their mother or father. they want will be presented as they are speaking,
walking
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. there is
copy
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 system the nature for
people
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 and they use it every time in their
life
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.
for example
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,
one
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 of my friend's sons, his name is Ali and lives in Gaziantep. He try to
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 Michol Jordon to can be a good player like him when he was 10 years old. Ali watched Michol all his matches and try to play like him. Ali is a very successful player in Turkey, he could be successful thanks to his love of basketball and his strategy. the example shows us, if you use to try to
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people
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 both side is good for you to learn some things.
on the other hand
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, a lot of
people
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 try to
copy
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 famous personalities. they want to be similar wear a dress like him and talk, walk even lifestyle. they
towant
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want
 live their personality's
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 ,not themselves.
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, Michal Joran Towant lives like white
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. That's why, he made many operations for his skin makes white.
however
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, he couldn't do it and he was very ugly a man but he is a good singer
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,
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sometimes
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 good, sometimes bad.
people
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 can forget their
life
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 and try to
copy
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 others. in my opinion,
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 day will come
people
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 understand we have only
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life
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 and i is our
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that is
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 why we should stop copying famous
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emulate
  • epitomes
  • self-esteem
  • void
  • lifestyles
  • role models
  • inspiration
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • unique talents
  • superficial
  • material wealth
  • public image
  • personal fulfillment
  • ethical values
  • constructive
  • personal growth
  • values
  • philanthropy
  • resilience
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