The table below illustrates how much money a single person and a couple in Australia need for a comfortable lifestyle after they retire.
The table compares the budgets needed for retired singles and
couples
to live a comfortable lifestyle in Australia.
Overall
, the average budget of a retired single person is much lower than that of a couple
. In addition
, while
housing is the biggest expenditure for single retirees, retired couples
need more money for leisure activities.
The expenditure for housing retired single people is $184, which is $10 lower than that of couples
. Meanwhile, singles retirees spend $140 on leisure activities, while
couples
spend $60 more. Regarding healthcare, couples
spend $177, which is $50 higher than the expenditure of a single retired person.
In terms of transport, couples
and singles need roughly the same amount of money, at $108 and $107 respectively. When it comes to clothing, food, and other things, the figure for an individual is almost half that of a couple
. A single person spends $44, $50 and $37 respectively on these categories, while
a couple
spends $80, $100 and $70. In general, the total amount of money spent by an individual is $684, whereas
the figure for a couple
is $931.
In contrast
, the majority of people participating in the survey expected to see improvements in communication between people, 64%, while
only 36% of them thought the opposite. Meanwhile, opinions on food quality were divided almost equally with just over half the survey participants believing that things would improve, and 49% thinking the opposite.Submitted by ieltsteaching0 on
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