Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words.
A number of individuals urgh governments to invest money for
life
searching outside the earth, others thought
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think
this
is a waste of the invesment
, Correct your spelling
investment
while
there are a vast number of problems on our home planets. In my opinion, I consider that searching for new
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a new
life
outside our planet can helps
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help
human
understand how our Fix the agreement mistake
humans
life
formed
which Add a missing verb
is formed
benefit
Correct subject-verb agreement
benefits
to
biological studies.
On the one hand, investing Change preposition
apply
fund
for extraordinary Fix the agreement mistake
funds
life
searching can benefits
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benefit
to
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apply
scientist
and humanity to understand how our species alongside Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
with
other Change preposition
apply
animal
form Fix the agreement mistake
animals
in
Change preposition
on
this
planet which can lead to new knowlege
founding. Correct your spelling
knowledge
For example
, biologist
can learn how the first cell Fix the agreement mistake
biologists
forming
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forms
in
the earth. Change preposition
on
Consequently
, this
can helps
scientists develop Change the verb form
help
a
new methodologies in medical terms, which can, in the long run, Correct article usage
apply
helps
to extend Correct subject-verb agreement
help
alive
rates or healing.
Correct your spelling
life
On the other hand
, the success rate for external life searching
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life-searching
program
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programs
are
unpredictable, Change the verb form
is
while
it likely
to be less than 10 per cent. With that, the investment of public money Add a missing verb
is likely
on
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in
this
program can considered as
a waste. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, the world have confront
with Change the verb form
confronted
a
numerous issues which Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
this
fund can helps
to Wrong verb form
help
releive
the majority impact, Correct your spelling
relieve
for instance
, climate change or diseases.
In conclusion, while
invest
money Change the verb form
investing
for
external Change preposition
in
life
searching
Replace the word
search
have
less success rate, Correct subject-verb agreement
has
but
it can Correct word choice
apply
benefits
humanity and society in medical research and development Change the verb form
benefit
program
, impacting Fix the agreement mistake
programs
to
a vast amount of population Change preposition
apply
in
the worldChange preposition
apply
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