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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the rate of the people who live in 4 countries in 3
perioad
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period
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 of time 1950, 2002 and projections for 2050.
Overall
, the proportion of folk who live in China highest,
ofter
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after
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 which
it
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apply
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India is
secound
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second
 and Japan is consistently accounted for the lowest.
As concerning
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 population who live
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in china
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china
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China
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 dropped steadily
about
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from about
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 25% to approximately 20%.
Whereas
, in India
rate
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the rate
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 of people gradually increase
15
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by 15
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% and about 20% respectively. In terms of
population
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the population
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 who live in
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the USA
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USA
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,USA
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 the figure
10
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was 10
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% in 1950 after which it slightly
falling
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fell
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 in 2002 about 5% and the bonus remained stable.
In
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other
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the other
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hand
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,hand
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 Japan consistently accounted stable
in
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apply
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all the time.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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