WRITING TASK 2 Youshould spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Beinga celebrity- such as a famous film star or sports personality- brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from yourown knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

A celebrity work hard on himself to achieve his goal of being famous. After he becomes famous he tries to avoid the attention of the crowds. Being a celebrity sometimes is a good thing and sometimes is not. In
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we will discuss both sides.
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being a celebrity Is mostly a good thing his way will be paved as
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as his family.
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, football players start from nothing till they achieve everything. Constantly moving from
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to another and
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more and more
money
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, they will be known to almost everyone and more and more companies will do ads with them and they will receive lots of
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he can secure his and his
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life. There is no doubt that it is a good thing to be a famous football player because you will receive a good amount of
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known to almost everybody.
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not everything is a hundred
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perfect. There are some problems
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a famous person.
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because he will avoid going out to enjoy his time.
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, he cannot go out with his family to enjoy their time in a restaurant or
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have fun on the beach.
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, he will avoid going out in public and
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celebrities try to not show their family so they can be unknown and go out in public as they like.
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, being famous will cause some problems
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the person and his family and he will try to avoid the crowds. In conclusion, celebrities work hard to achieve their goals and after
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they try to avoid going out in public. There are two sides, he will gain lots of
money
, but he will lose to
joy
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the joy
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of life.
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