WRITING TASK 2 Youshould spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Beinga celebrity- such as a famous film star or sports personality- brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from yourown knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
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A celebrity work hard on himself to achieve his goal of being famous. After he becomes famous he tries to avoid the attention of the crowds. Being a celebrity sometimes is a good thing and sometimes is not. In
this
essay
we will discuss both sides.
Add a comma
,essay
First,
being a celebrity Is mostly a good thing his way will be paved as will
as his family. Correct your spelling
well
For example
, football players start from nothing till they achieve everything. Constantly moving from club
to another and Correct pronoun usage
one club
gain
more and more Wrong verb form
gaining
money
. As a result
, they will be known to almost everyone and more and more companies will do ads with them and they will receive lots of money
. By that
he can secure his and his Add a comma
,that
family
life. There is no doubt that it is a good thing to be a famous football player because you will receive a good amount of Change noun form
family's
money
as well being
known to almost everybody.
Correct word choice
as being
Second,
not everything is a hundred percent
perfect. There are some problems Change the spelling
per cent
being
a famous person. Change preposition
with being
This
this
because he will avoid going out to enjoy his time. Remove the redundancy
apply
For example
, he cannot go out with his family to enjoy their time in a restaurant or a
have fun on the beach. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
, he will avoid going out in public and sometime
celebrities try to not show their family so they can be unknown and go out in public as they like. Replace the word
sometimes
Therefore
, being famous will cause some problems to
the person and his family and he will try to avoid the crowds.
In conclusion, celebrities work hard to achieve their goals and after Change preposition
for
that
they try to avoid going out in public. There are two sides, he will gain lots of Add a comma
,that
money
, but he will lose to joy
of life.Add an article
the joy
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