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The following two pia charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in1985 and in 1995.

The following two pia charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in1985 and in 1995.
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These double pie charts
illustrates
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 the outcome of
a
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research conducted into how popular watching
tv
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, talking with
friends
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, talking with
friends
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, playing computer games, eating out and other
activities
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where
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were
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 carried out between 1985 and 1995.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the most popular
activity
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 performed during their free time was watching
tv
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 in both years.
Other
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activity
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 was the least. A new
activity
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 was added to the survey namely; playing
of
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computer games in the second year. In 1986, watching
of
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tv
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 as a leisure
activity
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 was the highest among adults after the survey with 32%
which
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of which
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 the respondents performed.
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 the second choice of
activity
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 done was eating out and talking with
friends
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 with 23% and 21% respectively. Less of the aged population engaged in other
activities
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 at 6%.
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, in 1985, watching
tv
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 decreased slightly to 30%.
however
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, two new
activities
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 were added to the survey which
are
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: playing
of
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computer games and talking with
friends
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 with 27% and 26%,
therefore
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 becoming the second sort after
activities
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. Talking with family dropped drastically to 7%. Eating out and other
activity
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also
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 came down significantly to 8% and 2% becoming the least of the
activies
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activities
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, friends, activities, activity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Leisure activities
  • Survey results
  • Popularity
  • European adults
  • Shift
  • Passive entertainment
  • Outdoor activities
  • Health consciousness
  • Lifestyle
  • Technological advancements
  • Cultural experiences
  • Personal enrichment
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