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The chart below shows the aid from six developed countries to developing countries from 2008-2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the aid from six developed countries to developing countries from 2008-2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given column graph illustrates the amount of
aid
 given by six developed countries from 2008 to 2010, measured in billions of dollars. The US provided the most
aid
 in all
three
years
 and despite a slight drop in 2009 from 22 to 20
billion
 dollars in 2009, the figure rose to $25
billion
 in 2010. Germany, UK and Japan, were
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the
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other
three
 major donors, with figures ranging between 10 and 15
billion
 dollars. It is interesting to note that Germany increased its
aid
 continuously over the
years
, but the
aid
 from the other two showed fluctuations. The
aid
 from
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and Sweden was always under $10
billion
, yet the
three
years
 saw similar changes in the figures.
Overall
, the US contributed the most
in
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 supporting the developing world. whilst the
aids
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aid
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 of most countries fluctuated in
three
years
, Germany was the only country with consistent increases.
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