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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are varieties of
people
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 around the local community and the globe as a whole with different norms. Some
people
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 are willing to
change
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 for good and others are not.
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 is because it depends on an individual with their personal experiences to
change
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 or not. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it’s always good to
change
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 in order to bring new outcomes than the result of doing the same thing. There are certain groups of
people
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, who have the mentality of doing the same thing and expecting a changed result which is not at all possible. It is like you wanted to build a better body with just a good carbohydrate intake all the time. Is that possible? It is not; rather one has to be on a regular protein diet with a controlled amount, exercise and a good amount of water intake every day.
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 in our life, if things don’t work, set up a mental attitude to
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 the strategy, put it forward and go on. Nowadays unless we
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 and adapt to the current scenario, it’s possible for one to be lagging behind the corner. Having said that certain groups of
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 argue that doing similar things all the time will help them save time as they need not have to go for new ideas and start all over again
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 the work to set up.
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, a nurse by a profession but doesn’t like it much, if she has to switch to the other field and
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 has to start all over again so, it’s better to continue as it is.
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,
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 attitude will one day lead to stressful situations and by chance she may have to resign, ultimately becoming a quitter.
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change
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 for good always.
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Coherence and Cohesion
In the introduction, ensure to clearly address both views and provide a clear opinion. The body paragraphs should support both views and provide a balanced opinion in the conclusion.
Task Achievement
Ensure to provide more specific examples and develop the ideas further to improve task achievement and coherence.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • mastery
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • hesitancy
  • risk-taking
  • transitions
  • enrichment
  • equilibrium
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