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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are varieties of
people
 around the local community and the globe as a whole with different norms. Some
people
 are willing to
change
 for good and others are not.
This
 is because it depends on an individual with their personal experiences to
change
 or not. In my
opinion
Add a comma
opinion,
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 it’s always good to
change
 in order to bring new outcomes than the result of doing the same thing. There are certain groups of
people
, who have the mentality of doing the same thing and expecting a changed result which is not at all possible. It is like you wanted to build a better body with just a good carbohydrate intake all the time. Is that possible? It is not; rather one has to be on a regular protein diet with a controlled amount, exercise and a good amount of water intake every day.
Similarly
 in our life, if things don’t work, set up a mental attitude to
change
 the strategy, put it forward and go on. Nowadays unless we
change
 and adapt to the current scenario, it’s possible for one to be lagging behind the corner. Having said that certain groups of
people
 argue that doing similar things all the time will help them save time as they need not have to go for new ideas and start all over again
to begin
 the work to set up.
For instance
, a nurse by a profession but doesn’t like it much, if she has to switch to the other field and
then
 has to start all over again so, it’s better to continue as it is.
However
,
this
 attitude will one day lead to stressful situations and by chance she may have to resign, ultimately becoming a quitter.
Therefore
change
 for good always.
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Coherence and Cohesion
In the introduction, ensure to clearly address both views and provide a clear opinion. The body paragraphs should support both views and provide a balanced opinion in the conclusion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • mastery
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • hesitancy
  • risk-taking
  • transitions
  • enrichment
  • equilibrium
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