IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

Why are more people living alone in cities? Why is this the case? Is this a positive or a negative development?

#people #cities #case #development
IN RECENT TIMES WE CAN SEE THAT MAXIMUM NUMBER OF INDIVIDUALS ARE PREFERING TO LIVE ALL BY THEMSELVES IN CITIES
DUE TO
 MANY FACTORS
SUCH
 AS FINANCIAL INDEPENDENCE, FREEDOM OF CHOICE AND ACHIEVING THE GOALS.
FURTHER
 IN THE ,EASSAY WE WILL LOOK INTO THE ASPECTS OF IT BEING A BOON OR A CURSE TO THE INDIVIDUALS IN THEIR GROWTH. THE 20TH CENTURY HAS BROUGHT DRASTIC CHANGES IN THE WAY OF LIFE WHICH HAS IMPACTED ON PEOPLE TO TAKE STEPS TO UPGRADE THEIR QUALITY OF LIFE. IN
THIS
 DAY AND AGE PEOPLE PREFER LIVING ALONE IN BIGGER CITIES TO EXPLORE DIFFERENT ASPECTS LIKE MANAGING THEIR FINANCES, HAVING A LARGER SOCIAL CIRCLE, FOLLOWING A STRICT DIET AND FITNESS, FREEDOM IN THE CHOICES TO MAKE. PEOPLE WANT TO MOVE OUT OF THEIR PARENT'S HOUSE TO LEARN TO TAKE COGNITIVE DECISIONS ALL BY THEMSELVES.
FOR EXAMPLE
, WHEN I WAS 18 YEARS OLD IN THE UK, I MOVED OUT OF MY PARENT'S HOUSE BECAUSE I WANTED TO FOCUS ON MY CAREER, TAKING SOLE RESPONSIBILITY FOR MY EXPENSES AND MAINTAINING EXTEND MY SOCIAL CIRCLE. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW
THIS
 IS DEFINITELY A POSITIVE DEVELOPMENT BECAUSE WHEN WE LIVE ALONE THERE WILL BE A LOT OF TIME TO SPEND ON, THROUGH WHICH WE CAN MAKE NEW FRIENDS AND BE MORE SOCIAL. FOR A CLEAN AND HEALTHY LIVING
THIS
 IS
ALSO
 THE BEST WAY SINCE WE WOULD LEARN TO COOK OUR MEALS AND MANAGE THE EXPENSES
ACCORDINGLY
.
FOR EXAMPLE
, A PERSON LIVING ALONE WILL FOCUS MORE ON THEIR CAREER, TAKE GOOD CARE OF THEIR HEALTH, MAKE MORE FRIENDS AND WILL LEARN TO TAKE DECISIONS IN THEIR LIFE
WHEREAS
 A PERSON LIVING WITH THEIR FAMILY WILL BE IN A PROTECTED ENVIRONMENT AND THERE WOULD BE NO FREEDOM TO TAKE THEIR DECISIONS.
Submitted by tasnimasm2 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: