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With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction.

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It is an undeniable fact that a huge number of
animals
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 are deprived of their natural environment
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 they are at the stage of dying out
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 various factors
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 as the cutting of trees, city growth and unauthorized hunting. In my opinion, it is vital to preserve wildlife as they are part of nature.
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, some necessary steps should be taken to tackle
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 issue.
To begin
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 with, the first and foremost reason to save
animals
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 from vanishing as they are members of our ecological system. They play an important role in the
food
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 chain. To elaborate, in our
food
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 chain, humans and
animals
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 depend on each other.
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 of
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, if
animals
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 will disappear
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 it will create disturbance in the
food
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 chain and environmental system.
For example
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, lions rely on the
animals
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 like deer for their
food
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. As deer will be disappeared, it will directly affect the life of the lions too.
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, there are a plethora of actions which can aid to solve
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 issue.
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,
instead
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 of cutting trees, people should concentrate on planting new trees. It would help both
animals
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 and individuals by providing
food
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, medicines and oxygen.
Secondly
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, the government should impose some laws for the hunting of
animals
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.
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, in India, it is illegal to hunt any animal and if any person is caught
while
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 doing
this
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then
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 they will be sentenced to jail.
To sum up
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,
animals
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 are very important for our environment and they are beneficial for humans in a lot of ways. Individuals should take a few measures to preserve them.
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