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The given line graphs illustrate the percentage of households with electrical appliances and the time taken to do housework during the years between 1920 and 2019.

The given line graphs illustrate the percentage of households with electrical appliances and the time taken to do housework during the years between 1920 and 2019.
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The first line graph shows the proportion of families having electrical appliances, and the second line graph presents the time spent on
housework
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 over a period of 99 years.
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, the percentage of households who own washing
machines
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, refrigerators and
vacuum
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cleaners
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 all increased between 1920 and 2019,
while
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 the figure for
hours
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 taken to do
housework
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 presented a continuous downward trend. In 1920, the figure of families having refrigerators stood at about 3%, but experienced a dramatic increase over the following 60 years, and became the most popular electrical appliance in 1943, and consistently rose over the following 37 years until reached 100% in 1980. The percentages of families who have
vacuum
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cleaners
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 and washing
machines
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 stood at approximately 30% and 40% respectively in 1920.
Vacuum
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cleaners
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 saw a gradual rise between 1920 and 2000 (100%), and
then
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 remained steady. In 1960, the same proportion of households had
vacuum
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cleaners
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 and washing
machines
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, and the figure for washing
machines
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 slightly grew to roughly 75% in 2019. Regarding time consumed on
housework
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 per household. In 1920, 50
hours
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 were needed per week to deal with
housework
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, and
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 significantly declined to about 15
hours
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 in 1980. After that, the
housework
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 time witnessed a slight downward trend, falling to just over 10
hours
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 in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, machines, vacuum, cleaners, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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