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University students are increasingly studying abroad as a part of their studies. Enlist advantages and disadvantages.

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Nowadays, more and more
students
 after completing their high school education or undergraduate degree, prefer studying abroad.
This
 can be good as by studying in other countries they get exposure to a new world, resulting in increased job opportunities, that might help them in the long run. At the same time, these kids may become disconnected from their homeland
as well as
 family. In
this
 essay, I will take a closer look at the aforementioned key advantage and disadvantages. The greatest benefit of studying abroad is that it would physically and mentally prepare them to face challenges, that they wouldn't experience in their own country.
Additionally
, staying abroad will prepare them to stay away from their families because these days teenagers are so dependent on their
parents
, specifically financially and emotionally, that they lack ambition and don't have a burning desire to achieve something worthwhile in their life. Some of the spoiled brats even refuse to complete their degrees as they have access to everything worth working for,
that is
, they have been served everything on a platter by their
parents
.
For instance
, the survey conducted by Harvard University in 1990 proved that
students
 who lived away from their families in other countries, either for work or education purposes, for the span of at least 5 years had a greater success rate in their respective fields than those who pursued their degrees in their homeland.
This
 is because they had to earn for themselves by working on the weekdays or holidays
due to
 which they know the value of hard-earned money.
As a result
, these
students
 tend to invest their money for higher purposes
such
 as education, accommodation, health and other essential needs.
Overall
, the
students
 with the ambition and a thrive to prove themselves should be sent abroad because they would squeeze every drop out of the opportunity and would strive to be better irrespective of circumstances. Altogether, I see a big disadvantage in
students
 studying abroad because once they get used to foreign culture, they find their own nation boring, rather dull and uninteresting. Their experience of life where they are accountable to no one and a sense of freedom starts holding more importance in their life as compared to family.
Hence
, they often get disconnected from their family.
For example
, my uncle's son,
that is
 my cousin who went to Canada for pursuing Hotel management refused to come back to meet his
parents
 after completing his studies.
Therefore
, it is better if they complete their degree in their own country, under the inspection of their
parents
.
Overall
, studying abroad can be daunting, but it brings many opportunities for personal growth and development.
On the contrary
, as valuable as it is, sometimes foreign culture might influence an individual in a way that he develops a hatred for his own culture and country. In my opinion, not all
students
 should go abroad for higher studies but the ones that go should not forget their responsibility towards their families.
Submitted by Gopi on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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