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A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend.

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We live in a divided world into wealthy and poor countries,where the ability of people's straights depends on their quality of activity.When in one's country boys play football without shoes in other children stay at home playing computer games
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 they get overweight because of their sedentary activity.It leads to cardiovascular dassies,
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 making their heart shorter. In my ,opinion it has three significant reasons why people are hiring a personal fitness trainer.
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 they are lazy and are not able to push themselves to have an active lifestyle.,
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 because of some issues of health and somebody needs a special training program which should prevent damage to parts of the body.And ,
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 it is an enormous desire to achieve an irresistible body.,
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 with a fitter appeal , a body you can easily enhance your chance to find an attractive partner.A personal trainer is able to suit a special diet if you need to lose weight or you want to grow your muscles,but on the other ,hand they will charge you a lot which can reflect on your income.So mainly it depends on your income to hire a personal trainer or do it by yourself.I would advise if you have the ability will be better to hire. Everything
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 connected to sport is positive ,do you have a couch or run by the river you are getting better. Because it is straight connected to how long you will walk on
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 planet. Notwithstanding everything never give up, in spite of your desire for junk food keep up your goal.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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