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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the onlt way to increase recycling is for government to make a legal requirment. To what extend do you think laws are needed to make people recycled more of their watse.

#people #waste #home #onlt #government #requirment #laws #watse
Nowadays
people
 tend to be more aware of
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global warming. Many want to take some
action
to
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 it. One easiest
way
 that everyone can do is to recycle their used product at home. But it
seem
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 like there is only a small number of houses that really take
into
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an
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action
. Some
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 that the government should publish a law to
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 inhabitants to recycle more of their unwanted waste. In the following
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 I will be discussed
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the reasons why I do not agree with
this
 idea.
Although
, if the
governments
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 really
creates
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 a legal requirement for
people
 to take
action
 on recycling their own waste, it would not
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 in the long term.
This
 solution
seem
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 to solve the edge of the problem but not the cause of it.
On the other hand
, I personally
believes
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 that the right
way
 to encourage
people
 to
recycling
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 is to educate them with the knowledge of what benefits the environment will get by doing the recycle.
Moreover
, with
this
way
 of solving, the inhabitants can understand more about the crisis that
the
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global warming
are
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 in
the
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modern times.
In addition
, Government can provide
more
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 effective
way
 to encourage
people
 by creating a campaign or even creating a Station where
people
 can give their
recycle
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 waste and trade it into money to help them all the
way
 to keep collecting the unwanted ways in the home. In conclusion, I
believes
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 that it
is depends
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 on the majority of
people
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 responsibility but what government can do to increase the recycling
to
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action
 can be done by other creative options rather than a legal requirement.
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