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The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010.

The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the first four
months
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months'
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 expenditure of
United
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a United
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 States
family
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families
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 in dollars on
food
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,
gas
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, and
cloathing
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clothing
.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
average
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the average
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 monthly cost was similar for
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the fisrt
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fisrt
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first
 two months; January and
February
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 which was 300
USD
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. In
march
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March
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, average household expenditure sharply increased to 450
USD
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 and it steadily decreased to 250
USD
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 in
april
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April
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. In
january
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January
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 and
march
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March
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,
consumption
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 of
cloathing
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clothing
 was low respectively 250 and 300
USD
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while
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 in
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february
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February
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 and
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April
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april
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,april
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 it was 550 and 700
USD
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.
Cloathing
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The cloathing
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consumption
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 rate sharply increased in
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february
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February
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 and decreased in
march
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March
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 and in
april
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April
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 reached
at
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apply
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peak. For the first three months,
pattern
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the pattern
a pattern
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 of
food
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 and
gas
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consumption
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were
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was
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 identical, the
USD
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 value of
gas
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 depletion was lower than
food
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.
However
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, in
last
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 the month,
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the consumtion
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consumtion
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consumption
 pattern rotated,
cost
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the cost
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 of
gas
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 showed 500 and
food
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 300
USD
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. Lowest
gas
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 and
food
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expanditure
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expenditure
expenditures
 were in
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february
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February
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 and
april
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April
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on the other hand
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 highest
consumption
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viewed
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was viewed
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vice
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as vice
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 versa.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, gas, february, usd, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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